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1.Some people think that any money spent by thegovernment in supporting artist (such as painters, musicians and writers)should be spent on more important things. To what extant do you agree ordisagree?

2.Some people think that governments should do more tomake their citizens have a healthy diet. Others, however, believe thatindividuals should be responsible for their own diet and health. Discuss bothviews and give your own opinions.

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Some people argue that it is not the government's responsibility to help residents have a healthy diet. I total disagree with this view. Governments should take actions to help citizens to identify and keep a healthy diet.

For those people who advocate that individuals should be responsible for their diet, it is citizens' own right to choose their food. Governments don't have the right to decide and intervene（in） people’s diets. It is reasonable that different people have different preferences. For example, people from different parts of China differ a lot in term of diet. People from northern China like salty food, but people in south China tend to enjoy sweet food. It is unrealistic that people establish a monotonous diet. Furthermore, they believe that people know what they are eating and understand the impact on their health. So it would be a waste of public resources if governments put too much emphasis on people's diet.

But others think that governments need to do more to make citizens to build a healthy diet. On the one hand, they argue that having healthy food doesn't mean establishing a simple diet. A healthy diet can include various foods and can be delicious. And it seems that most people don't know the impact of unhealthy eating habits clearly. Instead of planning their diet carefully, most people eat whatever they want. On the other hand, people who eat a pernicious diet are at the risk of having severe diseases, which stresses the countries health system. For example, those people who smoke are more likely to have liver cancer. And those people who eat irregular breakfasts more likely to have stomach problems.

In my view, governments should promote healthy eating habits in TV programs or through advertisements. Governments should inform citizens of foods which are harmful to health. Otherwise， it would cost more to handle patients due to unhealthy diets. Moreover, a country with more healthy citizens could be more energetic and creative.

点评：

这篇作文有点偏题了。题目中让我们讨论关于政府应不应该采取行动的两种观点，你的观点是政府应该采取行动，那你的两段分论点就应该说的分别是：政府采取行动会有什么好处和政府不采取行动会有什么坏处。而你在第二段分论点中大篇幅解释了为什么有些人认为政府不应该采取行动就有点偏了；

我们要讨论的是“健康的饮食”，但你没有扣住这个点，南北方的差距不代表谁更好更健康；

这里不是一个自由意愿的问题，而是“假如居民饮食不健康，政府要不要出手”。

你的总观点是政府应该要采取行动来帮助居民养成良好习惯，那你的分观点就应该写“z政府应该要提升居民的生活幸福感之类的，所以政府要帮助居民来养成良好习惯”